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The map show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The map show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The three maps illustrate how
village
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the village
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 of Meadowside and the
town
 of
Fronton
 have changed over three different time periods (1962,1985 and now)
Overall
,
Meadowise
village
 increased in size and become
Meadowise
 suburbs. After some
changes
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,changes
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this
territory
were
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was
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 joined.
Furthermore
, the territories have developed and new infrastructure
have
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has
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 emerged. In 1962, both territories were
separately
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separated
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 without
a
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apply
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roads and
railway
line
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lines
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 behind
this
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these
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 two
area
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areas
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.
Town
Fronton
 had only one
railway
line
 from east to north,
as
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at
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 the same time
Meadowise
village
 located on
west
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the west
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from
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of
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Fronton
 had only one
road
 running through the entire
territory
 from
the
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apply
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west
 to north. By 1985, was big grown in
village
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the village
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Meadowise
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of Meadowise
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 and in
town
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the town
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Fronton
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of Fronton
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. The small
road
 across
village
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the village
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 become the main
road
 and
joined
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is joined
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 with
new
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a new
the new
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 part of
road
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the road
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 which run to
Fronton
 in
west
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the west
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.
Likewise
,
Meadowise
village
have
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has
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 developed a
house
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housing
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 estate in the east, a leisure complex in the north and
big
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a big
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 supermarket under roads in the south of
this
territory
. Nowadays
Meadowise
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Meadows
 is a suburb and
this
territory
 and
Town
Fronton
 are joined.
Railway
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The railway
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line
 runs from
Fronton
 have extended and
new
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the new
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line
 runs through the
west
 to
new
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the new
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railway
 station which is have been built. The north
from
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of
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 the station a hotel
have
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has
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 been created and the south
from
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of
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station
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the station
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 under the
road
 is
new
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a new
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 large business park
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, town, fronton, meadowise, territory, railway, line, west, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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