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Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the area of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the problem and give solutions ?

#people #standards #times #area #literacy #numeracy
Knowledge and quality of learning are very important to our society, and some
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people, nowadays don't really focus on their learning. In
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essay I will discuss the problem and my opinion. In my opinion, people today especially the young ones are very busy with their lives. The main factor of
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 as Minecraft and other online games. My wife gets a hard time disciplining my child, he is become stubborn now and hard-headed because of games, That's why he is performing very poorly in his studies and
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 very poor in reading comprehension. I think we as parents should learn to better discipline our children, and
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 the government should hire a teacher
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 competent to teach and qualified and dedicated to their profession.
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, the government should hire a teacher and instructors that have
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 in literacy and numeracy so that younger generations learn very fast.
To conclude
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic performance
  • standardized testing
  • educational attainment
  • pedagogical methods
  • curriculum design
  • digital literacy
  • teacher training
  • student engagement
  • educational resources
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • parental involvement
  • education policy
  • learning outcomes
  • formative assessment
  • classroom environment
  • supportive learning
  • baseline skills
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