The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to teach the problem of overweight children. Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

Many

thinks

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that

school

must raise the amount of sport and

exercise

at

school

, in order to prevent children

to become

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from becoming

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overwight

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overweight

.

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essay

disagree

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with the statement

,

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and will try to elaborate the reason and provide the solutions.

To begin

with, doing many

sports

and exercises at

schools

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school

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will

makes

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the

kids

more tired and exhausted when they come home, and eventually will make the

kids

too tired to do other activities.

Moreover

, if

kids

gets

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too tired, they cannot do well in

school

.

For example

, after long hours of

exercise

at

school

, when come home, they just want to take a lot of rest, and leaving study, it may lead them to

loose

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grade at

school

.

Do

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so many

sports

also

can lead the

kids

to lose concentration when they are

studiying

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studying

, because they feel

exausted

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exhausted

and tired.

Furthermore

, overweight

kids

, cannot perform

sport

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sports

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or

exercise

in

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for

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long

period

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periods

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. That may

harmful

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for

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to

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their breathing and

the

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extreem

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extremely

possible, may cause

a

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nausea. That condition may worsen their health. There are other ways to maintain the

kids

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kid's

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weight,

for

example

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teach them to eat more healthy

food

rather than junk

food

. Eating healthy

food

not

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is not

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only good for maintaining weight but

also

will

improving

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their health.

Schools

should make many variations of

food

, so the

kids

will not get bored eating healthy

food

.

Schools

can

also

ask the parents to bring only healthy

food

for

kids

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kids'

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kunch

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lunch

box

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boxes

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.

In addition

,

schools

can make

a sport events

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a sport event

sport events

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, so the

kids

will have

a

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light

exercise

without doing so much. In conclusion,

writer

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the writer

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thinks that

increase

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increasing

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the amount of

sports

are

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is

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not the best solution to prevent overweight

childrens

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children

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.

Provides

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Providing

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many healthy

food

and

sports

events can be the

better

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best

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solutions

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that the

school

can make.