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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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Some
people
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 think
universities
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 should have the same proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 in every major.I completely disagree with
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 idea for serval reasons. One reason why I think
universities
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 should not give the same numbers of male and female students is that it's not practical and realistic.
Men
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 and
women
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 tend to be interested in different subjects.
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,
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 are often keener on history, politics and engineering;
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women
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 are often more interested in subjects like education, psychology and art. So some
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 will have mainly male applicants,
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 others are more popular with females. So if a university decided to fill
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 with equal numbers of males and females, it would be difficult to fill
courses
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 like nursing as fifty per cent of the places needed to go to males. Another reason I disagreed is that would not be fair.
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 should be accepted onto
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 their abilities, and gender should not be relevant in education. If we force a regulation on the equal number of both gender, some
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 who have higher scores may not be able to gain access to
universities
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,
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 some
people
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 who have lower grades can have the opportunity to continue studying.
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 is neither good in moral nor economic dimensions.
Universities
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 should select the best candidates
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 their qualifications. In
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 way, both
men
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 and
women
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 have the same opportunities. In conclusion, I have a good reason to believe that having an equal number of
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 and
women
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 in
universities
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 in every subject is not a good idea.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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