Films and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have negative effect on society and should be banned. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
modern era, technology plays a vital role and made our life easier, but at the same time, the negative impact is Increasing simultaneously.
People
are more interested in seeing
films
and playing
games
which affect a negative impact on society because of violent content. Some
people
convince that they are part of the relaxation,
while
others reject
this
notion. In
this
essay, I will elaborate more detail and
thus
lead to a logical conclusion. First of all, many teenagers spend time involved in entertainment
games
and
films
to get rid of boredom.
However
, most
games
and
films
are more likely related to violent content which affects human mentality.
For instance
,
recent
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a recent
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horrible murder incident that happened in Delhi
is shaken
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the entire world, the victim told
while
investigating that idea got from the murder's film. Another factor to consider, many
people
are interested to play
a violent
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violent games
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games
by killing other
people
in
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virtually.
As a result
, in real
life
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,life
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more chance of
people
are more aggressive. Needless to say, all these points stand in good stead.
On the other hand
, these types of
games
and
film
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films
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are
considering
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considered
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as
ultimate
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the ultimate
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fun of entertainment. Violent
games
allow us
chance
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the chance
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to play with
group
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a group
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of
people
.
In addition
, we can learn
from
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leadership and helping
tends
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trends
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skills from these
games
. Another positive outlook in
this
regards
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regard
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is that violent
films
and
games
is
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are
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key
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a key
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tool for relaxation.
Moreover
, we can release all our
emotion
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emotions
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while
plays
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playing
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these
games
.
Hence
, it's apparent why many
people
in
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are in
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favour of
this
trend. In recapitulation, there are some merits of
games
and
films
but the negative consequence cannot be ignored.
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