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Human activities have negative effects on plant and animal species. Some people think it is too late to do anything about this problem. Others believe that effective measure can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give our opinion

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Nowadays, Most of human activities are blamed to affect various plants and animals seriously. Many people believe that there is not much left to do to make advances in
this
 situation.
While
 others may think that by taking appropriate methods, some improvements can be brought to the actual situation. In
this
 essay, these views are going to be addressed before reaching any conclusions. The number of
problems
 which are caused by humans namely industrialization is increasing. These issues have to be taken into account so fast that solutions which had been figured out could be applied.
Therefore
, there will be no need to be busy with more
problems
 in the future and propose some strict solutions.
For instance
, lack of
water
 has been issued for decades.
Also
Add a comma
,Also
show examples
 some possible ways to solve that have been generalized like
water
 circulation in houses which allows us to use a specific amount of
water
 on a loop. But if no practical
work
 is done, no improvement could be expected and after some time we will need to penalize people who use
water
 more than a special amount.
On the other hand
, there are numerous ways to monitor
water
 usage and think about what can be done to improve the situation.
For example
,
water
 usage of big places like companies or farms can be defined based on scientific ways to show how much
water
 is needed for them. It may be the main problem that
this
 part of academic
work
 to solving
problems
 is underestimated.
Then
, governments should set laws and can set fines on the violators of the laws.
Therefore
, a huge amount of
water
 can be saved before a new problem is issued. In conclusion, it is never late to
work
 out
problems
.
This
 perspective brings us a big group of
problems
 which needs our consideration. I believe the best way is to
work
 on them and figure out what measurements can be taken to help us solve
problems
.
Submitted by mr.haghighat1998 on

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