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People should only concentrate on a single skill for life because it is the best way to succeed. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #skill #life
It is true to say
skills
 are important very much in order to live in
globalised
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a globalised
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 world
however
 some
people
 believe only
focus
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focusing
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 on particular
skills
 in life since it is the finest path to be victorious I partially agree with the notion because I believe it is vital to concentrate on the single
skill
 but
also
 want to try to learn some other
skills
 To
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be
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being
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bring
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 the first crucial reason to support my view is that it was very difficult in current to rely on
single
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a single
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skill
although
people
 should try to be good at particular
skills
 but not
to
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apply
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forget to learn
other
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others
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 and if the individual ample with more
skills
 their chance towards the success will be more
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, for instance,
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for instance
 it was found on a survey of rich
people
 they are good at more than one
skill
 and
therefore
 we
also
 try to be good at
further
skills
On the other
hand
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 it is
also
 important to focus on particular
skills
 since many young
people
 try to gain
understanding
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an understanding
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 of many
skills
 but they fail on all and that's the reason they
unable
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are unable
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 to be good at any
skill
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, therefore,
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therefore
adult
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adults
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 must attain
single
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a single
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skill
 than only go to next one
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, in addition,
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in addition
 some
people
 who are are good at multiple
skill
 are always confused in their life because they are inadequate to take a decision in which direction they want to pursue their career. In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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 we have to try to be good single
skill
then
 only we have to
went
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go
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 for another
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