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Many countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. In this a positive or negative development.

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate
whether
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 a number of nations import myriads of various
food
 from all over the world.
This
 perspective has both pros and cons.
However
, its merits may outweigh its counterpart. Without a shadow of a doubt, importing
food
 brings
favorable
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 benefits to people in the country. Because it not only helps customers have a flood of options of
types’
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food
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of food
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 in eating but
also
 helps them choose
food
 suitable for their budget.
For instance
, in Circle K of Vietnam, there are myriads of
Korea's
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Korea
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food
 that are sold here
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 reasonable prices. By doing so, consumers can have a more diverse experience and try a range of cuisine without leaving their city.
Hence
, there is a wealth of advantageous
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 on citizens from
food
 import.
While
 the redeeming feature of
food
’s importation is widely acknowledged, its counterpart still lingers. Importing a great volume of
food
 from abroad triggers ever-growing health problems. Imported
food
 is regularly subjected to chemical treatment to preserve its quality to prevent it from deteriorating and oxidizing.
For example
, in Vietnam, according to research by the Vietnamese Ministry of Health, symptoms
such
 as an upset stomach and vomiting are linked directly to the consumption of imported meat and improperly treated from China.
Hence
, the long-term consumption of foreign
food
 poses a lot of great risks to people's health.
To sum up
, countries’ increase in dependency on imported
food
 has beneficial influences on populations, notwithstanding it has few detrimental side effects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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