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Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The subject of nuclear power has been a controversial one throughout the world. Many people believe that nuclear
weapons
 are advantageous,
while
 others disagree with
this
 notion.
Therefore
,
this
 essay will propound on the fact that nuclear
weapons
 would possibly lessen the chance of
war
 and benefit a larger population.
To begin
 with, the most promising ARGUMENT
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 the positive aspect of having a nuclear weapon for a country is that it increases its confidence. It can ensure peace not only for its own citizens but
also
 for the citizens of its
neighboring
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countries
.
In other words
, the knowledge that no other
countries
 will consciously raise a
war
 against these superpowers as they can easily destroy their enemies with
the
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nuclear
weapons
 boosts their morale and they can
also
 provide shelter to the ones in need.
For example
, some
countries
, namely, US and Russia ever since the Cold
War
and
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Cuban Missile Crisis are seen maintaining peace and maintaining diplomatic relations. The only reason why
this
 has happened is that they now have nuclear powers. The real irony is that having nuclear
weapons
 ensures safety for millions of lives and clean energy production, rather than a destructive method to wipe out the entire life of an area, which is the real intention why it was invented. Since the first nuclear attack, many
countries
 have acquired atomic powers, and the striking power of a nuclear weapon is far better than what was used in Japan in 1945.
To conclude
, though there is a significant risk of using nuclear
weapons
 irrationally, in general, it acts as a tool to evade any major
war
 and produce environment-friendly energy sources at present and in the future, which is advantageous for the world.
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