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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum

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The number of
people
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 who are overweight is increasing dramatically day by day, and
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, it puts more pressure on the healthcare system. The majority of
people
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 consider that one of the ways to address the issue is to implement more physical education classes in schools. I utterly disagree with
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 statement
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 some reasons
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 as healthy nutrition and psychological factors
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 it is apparent fact that physical education is significant for our lifestyle. First and foremost one of the leading causes of obesity is a lack of proper physical activity. Individuals living a sedentary lifestyle are more likely to be obese which in turn causes some diseases
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 as high blood pressure, diabetes, and infertility.
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 the information given by The World
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 Organization and other authorities that for good
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, adults ought to get the equivalent of two and a half hours of physical activity each week. Children should get even more, at least one hour a day.
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, Obesity usually occurs when a person makes it a habit to consume more than the required quantity of food. The number of McDonald's KFC and similar other restaurants are running up in almost all countries of the world.
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 the survey conducted among the population who spent time in these types of restaurants since they tend to eat ready meals which is the opposite of healthy eating. İn addition, Emotions
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 as boredom, nervousness, anger and stress impact eating habits in certain
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. These
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 increase their food intake as a response to these negative emotions. All in all, Obesity is a serious
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 problem that gives way to many other major
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 issues. It can be prevented by following healthy eating habits, and regular exercise.
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