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The charts below gives information about the price of tickets on airline between Sydney and Melbourne

The charts below gives information about the price of tickets on airline between Sydney and Melbourne
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The bar charts display the cost of one airline's tickets between
Sydney
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 and
Melbourne
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, Australia over a
two
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two-week
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week
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 period in 2013.
Overall
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, in both directions, the ticket
price
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 from Friday to Monday was broadly higher than on other weekdays.
In addition
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, except for
week
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 1 from
Sydney
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 to
Melbourne
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, flights on Fridays were the most expensive. Looking at the direction from
Sydney
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 to
Melbourne
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, the ticket
price
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 on Monday in
week
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 1 was the highest among all, at 80
dollars
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, twice as much as that of
week
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 2. In both weeks, Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday did not cost each passenger more than 40
dollars
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. The prices on Friday rose to 76
dollars
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while
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 the figures for Saturday and Sunday were cheaper, at 70
dollars
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 and 50
dollars
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 respectively. Turning to the ticket
price
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 from
Melbourne
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 to
Sydney
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, in
week
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 1, the
price
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 on Monday started at 60
dollars
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, 20
dollars
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 more than that of
week
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 2. The fare on Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday in both weeks was similar, 35
dollars
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. Tickets on Friday were offered at the highest
price
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 during the
week
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, reaching 80
dollars
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 in
week
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 1 and 60
dollars
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 in
week
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 2. For the rest of the
week
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, the prices were at most 60
dollars
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sydney, melbourne, week, price, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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