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The charts below gives information about the price of tickets on airline between Sydney and Melbourne

The charts below gives information about the price of tickets on airline between Sydney and Melbourne
#information #price #tickets #airline #sydney #melbourne
The bar charts display the cost of one airline's tickets between
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
, Australia over a
two
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two-week
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week
 period in 2013.
Overall
, in both directions, the ticket
price
 from Friday to Monday was broadly higher than on other weekdays.
In addition
, except for
week
 1 from
Sydney
 to
Melbourne
, flights on Fridays were the most expensive. Looking at the direction from
Sydney
 to
Melbourne
, the ticket
price
 on Monday in
week
 1 was the highest among all, at 80
dollars
, twice as much as that of
week
 2. In both weeks, Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday did not cost each passenger more than 40
dollars
. The prices on Friday rose to 76
dollars
while
 the figures for Saturday and Sunday were cheaper, at 70
dollars
 and 50
dollars
 respectively. Turning to the ticket
price
 from
Melbourne
 to
Sydney
, in
week
 1, the
price
 on Monday started at 60
dollars
, 20
dollars
 more than that of
week
 2. The fare on Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday in both weeks was similar, 35
dollars
. Tickets on Friday were offered at the highest
price
 during the
week
, reaching 80
dollars
 in
week
 1 and 60
dollars
 in
week
 2. For the rest of the
week
, the prices were at most 60
dollars
.
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