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Band 7.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...................,

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Dear Jonas, It's been a
while
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 since our
last
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 talk and it is so nice to hear from you again but now asking for some advice! What a tough decision you're dealing with but in my
experience
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 I'd say that going to college is not your best option right now. You've just finished school and it's pretty soon to know what would be best for your future! And more, studying until late every day isn't something that you are expecting to do nowadays, isn't it?
Due to
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this
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 instance would be the best decision you can make. I mean, earning some money and having savings could be great for your future plans of going to college, but not today! Just work a couple of hours a week and enjoy your free time! After all, you deserve it! Before I finish my letter, I would like to recommend to you some places nearby home in which you can go and leave your
resumes
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such
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 as the bakery or the pharmacy. I can totally see you working there dealing with customer service! Maybe you could have luck and get the job! I looking forward to meeting you in person soon! Best wishes, Nico
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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