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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. Comics, books, radio, television, film, theater.

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Introduction
These days, there are a lot of media that can be used for entertainment or education purposes,
for example
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books
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, television, and movies.
This
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 essay will elaborate on the advantages and disadvantages of these media for obtaining information purposes and give my opinion regarding the most effective one.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, many people used
books
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 as a reference when they are looking for educational data. Many
books
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 are written by educated people so it has a great reputation, and can give trusted knowledge.
On the other hand
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,
books
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 tend to get out of date, because of the ongoing science and there are always new discoveries.
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Television is
also
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 used by many people for searching for the latest info. These can be obtained by watching report programs on
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TV sets. The report that we can get from the television is up to date
,
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 because the news anchor always broadcast new and updated broadcasts for the viewers. The disadvantage is that the news program is not broadcasted all the time.
Body paragraph 3
Movies are
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 useful tools for searching for knowledge, but not in all genres. To give a clear example, in
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historical
films
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 we get knowledge regarding what happened in the past. But not in fictional movies, we cannot obtain any factual info
while
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 watching
this
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 cinema.
Conclusion
In conclusion, there are many advantages to using those media as a source
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pieces of information, but the most effective one is
books
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, by reason of the authors are professionals and experts so they can give trusted information.

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