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The improvements in technology currently bring about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe having simpler lives is the only solution, I would argue that technological advances can help to tackle these environmental problems.

#improvements #technology #effects #environment #people #lives #advances
In
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These days
technology
 is reached
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the skys
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skys
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sky
 and improved the complete human lifestyle in history,
however
 development in
tech
has
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lead
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 to harmful effects on the ecosystem and people's health, In my ,opinion there are more
of
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disadvantages than advantages to the
environment
 to improving automation. Let's start with discussing
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of growing
technology
, one way or another every new component or
tech
 uses Semiconductor chips after using
this
 for a time they become unusable so they need to be replaced with a new chip, all these old ones are hazardous waste
this
 is a substantial or potential threat to public health or the earth ecosystem, and another example could be radioactive waves which are produced by machinery they impact largely on
environment
 and other animals which are essential to running ecosystem smoothly.
According to
 the survey conducted by
Karos
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 research institute in 2022 earth's temperature is increased by 2 per cent
due to
substance
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 use of
technology
, by an increase in temperature whole
environment
's climate would be changed
such
 as the melting of glaciers.
On the other hand
, dramatical advances in
tech
 can be tackled for
few
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 climate problems,
Tech
 is heavily used in bio-science and improvements in science can help study or understand the main reason for those environmental problems,
therefore
 by knowing the root cause of an issue it can be reversed or at least take precise precautions to avoid those complications.
To conclude
, a range of people believe that having simpler lives is the solution to stopping those environmental issues I partially agree but leaving without the use of any
technology
 is difficult, they should be used in a meaningful way for humans
as well as
 for the
environment
.
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