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Exposure to international media, such as films, TV and magazines, has an impact on the local culture. What do you think of these impacts? Do you think that the advantages of these impacts outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Globalization facilitates the way of communication.
As a result
,
people
 are tending towards foreign cinemas and magazines
as well as
 satellite programs.
According to
 the experts,
this
 tendency affects regional culture, though I suppose, it is beneficial for skill development, language learning and
also
 for entertainment. Here, the following paragraphs aim to highlight various advantages of foreign media in support of my argument. To start with, one of the major drawbacks of spreading International means of entertainment is that it alienates
people
 from their native culture. As much as
people
 get
touch
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 with foreign values and fashions, they prefer to eat with folks and chopsticks or wear jeans and tops.
However
, foreign movies like Science
fictions
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fiction
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 and
thrilers
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thrillers
 develop
a
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Child
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 Psychology,
as
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 a result, he or she is more capable than others in
problem solving
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 and innovating new things.
For example
, the children who are watching Sherlock Holmes are
more
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sharp in thinking.
Likewise
, reading International Journals and tv dramas
encourage
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encourages
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 children to learn a new language which adds
a
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 additional qualification
in
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 their resume. It not only helps
to
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them to
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 get a good job but
also
 boosts their capacity of learning.
For instance
, the increasing
popularly
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 of Korean dramas in
the
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developing countries is inspiring
people
 to know about Korean
Lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and move
in
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 the country.
Apart from
this
, these films and shows offer a different taste to watchers where there
is
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 not enough sources of refreshment. In a nutshell,
although
 it is well accepted that global media has negative impacts on national norms and values, I believe, it has some positive impacts on the development process of a child. It improves their stoke of knowledge. So, I think the benefits outweigh its disadvantages.
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