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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays there are people who still prefer same-sex schools justifying their answer on the student's academic level,
while
 there are others who say that in a mixed ,institute
children
 could learn other knowledge than academics which will be useful for their life as adults
such
 as sharing and caring for each other. I believe more in
this
 one but through
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 I will have a view from both sides. There are individuals who still think about going to a same-sex
school
 will make the student a better and strong person and they will have better academic results just for the simple fact that there are no other girls or boys bothering around. I do not believe in
this
 type of education even though many people do. A recent study shows that boys who went to a same-sex institution are shyer than others going to a mixed institute,
this
 is basically because since they were kids never learnt how to share a classroom with the opposite sex.
On the other
hand
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 mixed
school
 can provide
children
 with different areas to learn about not just the academic ones. It is well known that people who went to a mixed institution can face a conversation with the opposite sex without any problem.
Moreover
, there are studies showing that
children
 prefer to go to
school
 where they can share time with others than those of the same sex, finding
this
 attractive and playful.
Due to
this
 and my own experience going to a mixed
school
, I totally can say that everything in mixed schools provides
children
 with better skills other than academics.
To conclude
, there could be different options of which
school
 should be or not better for kids but one thing is for sure and it is always necessary to think which option is better for our
children
 and
therefore
 their academic results and by forcing our kids to be in a place where we would have been it is not good for them as well.
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