One of the consequences of improved technology is that many jobs that used to be done by people can now be completed by robots or computers. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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the improvement of technology has
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many jobs take
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by robots or computers
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technological improvements will lead to more
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for human beings.
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of using robots or
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automation in the
workplace
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will cause many
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their
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. Many
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of jobs
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same pattern that could
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robot
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in a restaurant they have one
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, so the owner of
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robot
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the cost they spent.
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, many
people
who
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their
job
due to
the reason that
robot
is more effective than human.
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, The new technologies of using
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robot
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in the
workplace
will bring more
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to be more productive. If
human
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have
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energy and time when they do their
job
;
robot
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could
work
better with limitless
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that.
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people
have to
work
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hours a day, but
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can do more than that.
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,
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will be more productive and
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less time when they have to finish the
job
.
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, the trend of using
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in
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workplace
have
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cause
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a problem
that
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many
people
will lose their
job
. Meanwhile, I think it
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that
this
phenomenon give more
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to the company
due to
the productivity in
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the workplace
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.
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