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One of the consequences of improved technology is that many jobs that used to be done by people can now be completed by robots or computers. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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 the improvement of technology has
been
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caused one problem
that
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many jobs take
control
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 by robots or computers
instead
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 of
people
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. In my opinion, I believe that
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technological improvements will lead to more
beneficial
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 for human beings.
This
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 essay will discuss the advantage and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of using robots or
computers
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 automation in the
workplace
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 with, The utilization of robots to change human
role
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 in
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the work
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work place
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 will cause many
people
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lose
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 their
job
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. Many
kind
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 of jobs
have
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a
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 same pattern that could
be replace
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 by
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a robot
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robot
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robots
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,
waitress
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a waitress
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 in a restaurant they have one
job
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 to serve the
costumer
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customer
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, so the owner of
restaurant
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the restaurant
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change
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this
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 role
by
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the
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robot
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 to
efficient
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 the cost they spent.
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, many
people
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 who
work
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 as a waitress have
lose
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 their
job
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due to
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 the reason that
robot
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 is more effective than human.
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, The new technologies of using
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the robot
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robot
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robots
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 in the
workplace
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 will bring more
beneficial
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 to be more productive. If
human
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humans
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 have
limit
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 energy and time when they do their
job
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;
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robot
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robots
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 could
work
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 better with limitless
of
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that.
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, government abolish a rule that
people
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 have to
work
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 with maximum
8
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hours a day, but
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robot
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robots
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 can do more than that.
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,
company
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 will be more productive and
spent
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 less time when they have to finish the
job
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To sum up
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, the trend of using
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robot
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the robot
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 in
a
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the
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workplace
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have
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cause
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 a problem
that
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in that
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 many
people
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 will lose their
job
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. Meanwhile, I think it
is truly agree
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 that
this
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 phenomenon give more
beneficial
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benefits
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 to the company
due to
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 the productivity in
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workplace
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the workplace
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