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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside thn in a big city. Do you agree ot disagree? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

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Today, most people tend to relocate to big cities. People argue that it is always good for
children
 to be bought up in the
countryside
 than in the big cities. Well, I completely agree with the point that
children
 have to enjoy the beauty of growing up on farmlands more than in a big
city
. First of all, the green belt always poses pleasant and cool weather. They are the beauty of any country. Juveniles have to be bought up in the
countryside
 so as to enjoy the beauty of the scenery
,
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 and learn the importance of farming,
also
, they can learn the most valuable aspects and challenges faced in
life
 by the
countryside
 folks.
For instance
, in India the
children
 bought up in the green belt are stronger, the values learnt by them are appreciated etc. Practical experience outweighs theoretical experience.
On the other hand
, farmlands provide fresh air to breathe, minimal traffic, and non-contaminated and fresh crops to feed upon. ,
Also
 the cost of living, in the
countryside
 is reasonable which will teach
children
 to spend money wisely. Most importantly,
life
 on farmland is far away from gadgets which is a huge plus to acknowledge. In the contrast,
city
life
 has numerous opportunities in terms of education and employment.
However
, there are a lot of disadvantages to growing up in a
city
due to
 the fact that of pollution, traffic, contaminated food etc.
To sum up
, growing up in the
countryside
 is advantageous compared to
city
life
.
Hence
, I personally feel
children
 should be bought up in a green belt than in a big
city
.
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