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In many countries, some people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country. Others believe that the government should not allow people to earn salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
 modern era, many
people
 could earn a high
salary
 from their working place. Some
people
 argue that
this
 phenomenon is good for the
country
,
while
 others believe that the government should take action to control
people
’s salaries.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view, and I argue in
favor
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 of the former. On the one hand, the majority of
people
 believe that the government should regulate a standard for
salary
 so that there is no noticeable social gap between affluent families and underprivileged ones.
This
 is because when there is no standard for
salary
, there is a tendency for
people
 to have more money than others;
as a result
, it may cause
a
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discrimination between prosperous and poor families.
On the other hand
, I believe that the high
salary
 may assist developing countries to become developed countries and the citizens will be more wealthy. One of the index standards for being a developed
country
 is that citizens of a
country
 should have enough money to fulfil their needs and there is no high gap in the society.
Therefore
, when
people
 have a lot of money from their jobs there is a predisposition for them to become more prosperous and there is a possibility for them to support each other.
As a result
, there will be no noticeable gaps in the society, and because their citizens are wealthy the
country
 will become a developed
country
. In conclusion,
although
 regulating a standard on
people
's
salary
 may have a demerit to a
country
such
 as there will be a gap in social strata. I believe that it is paramount for countries if they have workers who have a high
salary
 because it will contribute to the development of a
country
. Given
this
 situation, I argue that governments should take an important step to regulate the
salary
 flows in a
country
.
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