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In many countries, some people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country. Others believe that the government should not allow people to earn salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
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 modern era, many
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 could earn a high
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 from their working place. Some
people
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 argue that
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 phenomenon is good for the
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,
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 others believe that the government should take action to control
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’s salaries.
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 essay will discuss both points of view, and I argue in
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 of the former. On the one hand, the majority of
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 believe that the government should regulate a standard for
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 so that there is no noticeable social gap between affluent families and underprivileged ones.
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 is because when there is no standard for
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, there is a tendency for
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 to have more money than others;
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, it may cause
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discrimination between prosperous and poor families.
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, I believe that the high
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 may assist developing countries to become developed countries and the citizens will be more wealthy. One of the index standards for being a developed
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 is that citizens of a
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 should have enough money to fulfil their needs and there is no high gap in the society.
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, when
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 have a lot of money from their jobs there is a predisposition for them to become more prosperous and there is a possibility for them to support each other.
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, there will be no noticeable gaps in the society, and because their citizens are wealthy the
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 will become a developed
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. In conclusion,
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 regulating a standard on
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's
salary
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 may have a demerit to a
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 as there will be a gap in social strata. I believe that it is paramount for countries if they have workers who have a high
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 because it will contribute to the development of a
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. Given
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 situation, I argue that governments should take an important step to regulate the
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 flows in a
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