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some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. to what extent do you agree with this view?

#people #government #money #arts
Nowadays public think that
government
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the government
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 spending more
money
 on the
arts
considered
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is considered
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as
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apply
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a waste of
money
.
i
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 do agree with the statement, Art is not essential for everyone's living there are so many other elements that
Government
 should focus on.
First
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of
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allof
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 ,
all
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the
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government
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governments
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 should consider our health, education and the economy. There are so many
community
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communities
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 still uneducated and so many are struggling for daily food, so they should spend
money
 on
this
 kind of
things
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thing
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. First
government
 should bring more public schools and need to provide free education for students, those who are
under
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low income. In
current
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the current
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 ,world Education is very important.
Secondly
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 Health is
also
 more important for Human Beings.
A
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The
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 number of Public Hospitals are very less,
people
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and people
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 who are below the poverty level cannot afford Private hospital fee, so many are dying because of a lack of
money
,
Government
 are responsible for
this
. The solution for
this
 disaster is more Public Hospitals and Give Free treatment. Art is good, it gives Entertainment,fun and Happiness but These are enjoying only
Middle-class
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by Middle-class
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People
 or high-class
people
. Low-class
people
 don't have enough
money
 to
spending
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spend
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.
Government
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The government
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 spends
money
 on the
arts
 and
also
 they will Charge a fee for most of the
Arts
programme
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programmes
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. So in my point of
view
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,view
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 it is a waste of
money
, there is no Equality only a few are Entertating with
Arts
 rest of them is Struggling with their Life. Spending
money
 on above mentioned points is much better than spending
money
 on the
arts
, That will Give more happiness and life to the Majority of
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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