Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

During the past few
years
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it has been noticed that a great number of individuals spend their entire
life
pursuing a job career that they
despite
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or one that does not value their abilities at all.
While
hundreds of reasons can explain
this
phenomenon, the most common one can be arguably identified
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the need
of
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financial freedom. It is reasonable to think that most
people
, especially when they are young, crave
for
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the benefits that
owing
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personal money can bring to themselves and to their
household
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. In
fact
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in most
cases
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the thought of being a financial burden on parents is what pushes teenagers towards finding jobs. In
such
scenarios, since what really counts is getting paid, the kind of job that someone
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to take on does not really matter. What happens next is that these same
people
usually
continues
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to work where they started even after they realized that
such
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is not what really fits them because of the financial security that they reached. Another main reason why individuals stay in a work environment they hate is because they may have grown out of it but do not have the courage to start all over again somewhere else
while
pursuing their dream career. In all of the cases examined above and more generally in any case in which
people
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to spend their existence doing work they dislike very much or have no talent for individuals end up being highly dissatisfied with not only their careers but pretty much with everything that revolves around it. Their
life
, their coworkers, their clients and everything that can be correlated to
such
part of their
life
is arguably going to be overlooked and undervalued. Statistics and studies refer that
people
who are prone to remain in
such
situations are more likely to develop depression
while
living with the constant feeling of being valueless. In
conclusion
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settling for anything at some
of
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point
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in
life
while
aiming just for financial freedom without being able to pursue something that would make them more satisfied will usually cost someone’s mental health.
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  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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