Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, thanks to growing up technology, connecting community around the world easily and

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sharing their ideas, experiments and solutions, we have too many options. some nations believe so, and I completely agree with that. About one century before, by the limitation of data sources and reliable information, there were few options.

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libraries had a key role for the public of these ages, they were limited to major cities. so, a large number of the population did not have access to those sources.

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,today in regard to dramatic advances in electronics and all types of sciences especially in computer science,there are a lot of data sources accessible from the entire world ,

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their reliability of them could be verified by some technical organizations of those who attended to them and make significant decisions.

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the appearance of smartphones in recent decades, could be more facilitated

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achieving the findings and experiences of communities from different cultures and regions.

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, if you want to travel 100 years ago to another country , your information about the destination was limited to a few personal visitors or maybe some general geographical books,but nowadays, it is too easy for searching online or accessing comprehensive information from online libraries. so you have too many elections. To sum it up, I strongly agree with those who believe we have too

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the progress of science and technology in all kinds of human knowledge compared to the past.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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