Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think is a positive or negative development?
Spending several
hours
on smartphones
is becoming prevalent in some children
, even though I believe it may have adverse impacts on their brain function and social behaviours.
Some children
are using their smartphones
and tablets for several hours
a day. It may be happened due to
having access to these electronic devices
more easily than before. Indeed, parents are mostly inclined towards permitting their children
to use their smartphones
for entertainment. Moreover
, it is a way for parents to not pay proper attention to their children
mostly because they are busy with their jobs to provide for their family.
There are a number of drawbacks that may arise from using smartphones
for long hours
. An apparent disadvantage is that these electronic devices
might impede the imagination power process of children
’s brains. For example
, a child who read a novel may imagine the story in its setting and enable their imagination to enjoy the book more than others who just watch the story on their smartphones
. Another adverse impact is that according to
official scientific research, children
who use their electronic devices
even for educational purposes may face a problem remembering sequences of events in a novel or story. furthermore
, children
who use their smartphones
for several hours
are unlikely to make friends and participate in social activities related to their peers. It probably happens to owe to spending most of their time on these devices
.
In conclusion, I believe using tablets and smartphones
for several hours
is a concerning issue among some children
and it may breed a wide range of psychological and social problems. It is suggested that by limiting the hours
of smartphone usage, parents may alleviate the negative impacts of this
matter.Submitted by sepehr.kahvand on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite