The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram illustrates the process of producing instant noodles
for marketing and it is an automated course with minimal manual labour.
Looking from an overall
perspective,it is readily apparent the procedure comprises eight steps and this
linear production yields instant noodles
to consumers.
Initially
,flour is delivered to storage tanks through trucks and it is pumped into tanks ,prior to being mixed with oil and water in the mixture.Thereafter
, the mixture is prepared as dough sheets using rotatory rollers.
These sheets are then
striped into noodles
sticks during the next step using machines.Subsequently
,all these noodles
stripes are packed into heat-proof containers to be cooked with oil.The following stage is the drying technique,which prompts the noodles
as instant noodles
.
After
this
, vegetables are added to the noodles
and then
seasoned with spices before being stored in cups.Finally
, these cups are labelled and sealed to ensure the quality of the product.Then
it is ready for marketing.Submitted by g.s.subasinghe on
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