You have been invited to the engagement party of a friend from another country. You cannot go but you have bought a gift for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • say how you feel about the engagement • explain why you cannot go • tell your friend about the gift you have bought for him/her

Dear Rita, I hope you are doing well. I am very delighted to know that you and Raman are
getting engaged. It was just like yesterday that you were asking about if he was the one who really meant for you. I am so happy for both of you getting together to create lasting memories. I know that you will be busy making arrangements and planning to invite guests for
occasion, but I am so sorry to add burden to your thoughts, unfortunately, I have my final exams falling on the same date as your engagement. I requested my professor to change the dates for my exam,
, he said that was the only available date for
month. So I am planning to visit you after my exams with a beautiful gift that I purchased to celebrate your engagement party. It's a golden necklace and I hope you remember the one that you had dreamed about
we attended the inauguration function of the popular Jewellery store. It has been on my mind for quite a few days and I
managed to get
to gift you on your engagement. I am eagerly waiting to see you soon. Enjoy the day and convey my wishes to Raman as well. Take care till
. yours lovely, Jeevith
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph carries a single clear idea throughout to maintain a high level of coherence.
coherence cohesion
While your greeting and closing are well-executed, consider varying sentence structures and employing a wider range of cohesive devices to improve flow and cohesion.
task achievement
Your task response is commendable as you addressed all parts of the task effectively. To achieve a higher score continue to develop each point thoroughly with additional details and examples.
task achievement
The tone is suitable for the context of writing to a friend; it's friendly and supportive. Keep up the good work in utilizing an appropriate tone for different types of letters.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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