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People who buy friendly vehicles like electric cars should receive a subsidy on tax. This will discourage people from buying polluting cars and thus lower emissions. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #vehicles #cars #subsidy #tax #emissions
In the modern world, we have many options to
use
 for
personal
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a personal
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vehicle
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vehicles
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. Many
people
 think that the government must have some attraction to make
thier
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their
 citizen desire to buy
a
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an
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 electric
car
 because it can reduce many
polution
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pollution
 problems with can made from
petro
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petrol
cars
.
However
, In my
openion
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opinion
that
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I
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 really agree with
this
 statement was mentioned in
this
 topic.
Firstly
, many
country
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countries
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in
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at
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 the current time
consume
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consumes
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 a lot of normal
car
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cars
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 with high consumption of
petro
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petrol
 and gas demands. In the same way, both had many
problem
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problems
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 with
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the effect
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effect
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effects
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from
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of
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 their
used
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users
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such
 as air
polution
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pollution
 or
noice
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noise
 in the urban areas.
On the other hand
, they found a new solution to fix
that problems
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that problem
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 that we called
"ELECTRIC
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the "ELECTRIC
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CAR
" but they had some
barrier
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barriers
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 to
make
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making
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 a success for everyone
use
thier
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their
 new solution, because
of
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apply
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, it has a high investment cost and
directly
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 impact
to
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on
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 a high
price
. The
middle class
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 citizens don't have enough money to pay for a new
car
imidiately
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immediately
becase
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because
 of they had
a
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apply
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many
expense
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expenses
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in
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before and if they had more expensive than
traditional
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car
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cars
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. They will desire to buy a gas
car
 more than
electric
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an electric
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because
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one because
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 of the
price
.
Moreover
, in many
country
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countries
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such
 as
in
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Thailand, they don't have
a good facilities
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good facilities
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 to support
a
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an
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 electric ecosystem.
In
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The
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the
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apply
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currently
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current
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, all
EV
cars
 take a lot of time to charge
thier
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their
the
 battery
with
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apply
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more than one hour to get a
fully
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full
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 status. And many
people
 had
thier accomodation
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their accommodation
 in
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a condominium
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condominium
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condominiums
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 or
apartment
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apartments
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 without
personal
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a personal
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EV
charger
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chargers
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. They must
to
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apply
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charge their
EV
car
 in
gas
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a gas
the gas
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station
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stations
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 with
a
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an
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 only two or three charging platforms so it
make
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makes
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 a lot of
unconvinience
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inconvenience
convenience
to
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for
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 their users because
sometime
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sometimes
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 they must to
waiting
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wait
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 for only one charge
at
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apply
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outside
thier
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their
 living area.
On the other hand
, if
EV
cars
 have a lower
price
 than
petro
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petrol
cars
, it can make
easier
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it easier
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 to desire for
a
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apply
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new
customer
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customers
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 to buy
thier
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their
 new
vehilce
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vehicle
, but in case of outstanding low
price
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prices
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. The
price
 will include a
tax
 for
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and some type of
tax
for
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to
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fix
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fixing
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thier
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their
polution
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pollution
in
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at
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the nation
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nation
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national
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 level, but, if
EV
car
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cars
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don't
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doesn't
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 have
a
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apply
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polution
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pollution
solution
 to emit. The government should reduce the
tax
of
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on
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this
 section to convince
thier
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their
people
 to
use
 a new
car
 in
EV
 type.
For the
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The
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 conclusion that the government should reduce their
polution
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pollution
tax
 to increase
a
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an
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 attraction demand for
new
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a new
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type
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types
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 of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 like
EV
car
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cars
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 and the direct effect when
their
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apply
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people
use
EV
car
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cars
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, it will
be reduce
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reduce
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any
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apply
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polution
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pollution
 in the same way.
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