To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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population
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evey
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every
country compared to the previous years. More the population increase it's the responsibility of each
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country's
government to
enure
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the people are provided with the basic necessities. One of the main basic
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is
food
which plays a vital role. It's important for the country to consider
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use of edible
insects
as a
food
source. Edible
insects
are easy to find in places that could be easily decomposed
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and
cost effective
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.
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for Agriculture edible
insects
plays a vital role as they are mainly used as an organic way of farming. And
insects
are considered
as
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a farmer's best friend as it provides oxygen to the plants and the required amount of nutrients to
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plants for them to grow. Harvesting the
insects
will impact the environment in a way where the plants,
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fields will no longer have healthy organic
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and farmers and people will be affected
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artificial
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way
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of fertilizing.
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, it is considered to be
unhelathy
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unhealthy
as
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the
researches
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hasn't proved the nutrient facts on eating
eddible
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edible
insects
.
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certain countries
such
as India, Sri Lanka,Nepal,and certain European countries
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not willing to consume
eddible
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edible
insects
as
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food
. Though we could see there are benefits
such
as
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, easy to find we should
also
consider the willingness people have towards eating
eddible
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edible
insects
as
a
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food
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food
before making a
decission
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decision
.
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