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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

#food #support #population #country #insects #source #people #nature
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increase
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population
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 in
evey
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every
 country compared to the previous years. More the population increase it's the responsibility of each
countrie's
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country's
 government to
enure
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 the people are provided with the basic necessities. One of the main basic
need
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 is
food
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 which plays a vital role. It's important for the country to consider
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 use of edible
insects
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 as a
food
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 source. Edible
insects
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 are easy to find in places that could be easily decomposed
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cost effective
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 for Agriculture edible
insects
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 plays a vital role as they are mainly used as an organic way of farming. And
insects
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 are considered
as
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a farmer's best friend as it provides oxygen to the plants and the required amount of nutrients to
the
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plants for them to grow. Harvesting the
insects
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 will impact the environment in a way where the plants,
paddy
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 fields will no longer have healthy organic
decomposer
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 and farmers and people will be affected
with
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artificial
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way
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 of fertilizing.
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, it is considered to be
unhelathy
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unhealthy
 as
still
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 the
researches
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 hasn't proved the nutrient facts on eating
eddible
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edible
insects
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.
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 certain countries
such
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 as India, Sri Lanka,Nepal,and certain European countries
still
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 not willing to consume
eddible
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edible
insects
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 as
a
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food
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food
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. Though we could see there are benefits
such
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 as
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, easy to find we should
also
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 consider the willingness people have towards eating
eddible
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edible
insects
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 as
a
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food
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food
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 before making a
decission
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decision
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