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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullnness of time classroom teachers will betotally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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 fast-paced life ,
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 takeover every impossible possible. As in the education curriculum advancement provide tremendous opportunities .
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, the argument state that there is no need for
teachers
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 because
technology
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 overcomes the situation. I disagree with
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 observation of
teachers
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 which is vital for society. First and foremost,
teachers
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 are a major form of medicine for students .
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, physical teaching is fruitful so they can enhance more
knowledge
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 and adapt
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.
In addition
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, there is a strong relationship between
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 and students . For, instance, students enjoyed their studies with seniors , as in online platforms admission do not satisfy with the artificial intelligence teaching style. They don't grasp
full
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the full
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knowledge
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 which
is fulfil
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 by schooling .
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, in online teaching learners do not join the comfort
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 with friends, where they can share their thoughts, ideas
knowledge
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 and many other things which they learn from their partners for help in their studies.
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, the substitution of professionals
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 creates a lack of focus and confidence in education .
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, they always motivate children to study hard and dream big. For, example,
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American universities considered online teaching is beneficial in only lockdown after a tremendous number of children distract from
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their studies
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 Because they use games and adverse things on the internet.
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 , offline classes with
teachers
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 are important for the growth of children.
however
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,
technology
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 is vital in other formats like making
assignment
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assignments
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 and learning but tutors build
structure
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the structure
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 of society. In conclusion,
technology
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build
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builds
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a
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 easy and adaptable lifestyle
of
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in
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community
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a community
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. As in
education
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the education
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system
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teachers
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 should be major to make a wide change in
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.
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, there
are
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is
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 other more source of option where
technology
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have
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has
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 a huge
significant
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significance
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.
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