Children as young as right own a mobile phone nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Currently, with the advancement of automation, youngsters
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become using
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cell
phone
. There is no denying the fact that the main impact of the
cell
phone
is arguable.
This
essay will discuss both arguments in detail. There are some people who argued that the benefits of having a
phone
at a young age considerably outweigh its disadvantages. public often say that youngsters might need to communicate with their family in
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.
Therefore
, owning a
phone
might allow
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at
young
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age to contact their parents and inform them directly as they are more prone to some issues like
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and raping. Indeed,
it is clear that
childrens
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children
children's
required to have a
phone
in order to talk to their family about a disastrous situation.
On the other hand
, in
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of disadvantages, giving a mobile device
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kids
can distract them and affect their performance at school.
For instance
, a prestigious journal recently published an article showing that 80% of
kids
who own a
cell
phone
have
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grade
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in most of their school lessons.
In other words
,
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devices can cause distraction and confusion for
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children.
Furthermore
,
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phone
has many programs and games that easily disrupt
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attention. In short,
it is clear that
phones affect
kids
negatively as it makes them perform worse at
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school. In conclusion,both arguments
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merits. On balance,
however
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believe that the advantages
outweight
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outweigh
the
demirts
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demerits
.
This
is because
kids
are more vulnerable to kidnaps or any difficult case which required them to directly ask for
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their family.
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