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You have been going to a piano teacher for the past month. However, it no longer fits into your budget or busy schedule Write a letter to your piano teacher. In your letter: • Thank him for his efforts and time • Explain the changes in your circumstances • Explain that you may be able to pick it up again

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Dear Tom, I am writing to inform you that I will not be able to attend piano classes from coming Monday.
Firstly
, I want to say thanks for
this
 joyful journey over the piano classes. You not only did a lot of struggle to teach me but
also
manage
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 the time in the evening which no other mentor accepted. The reason I need to take off is that I am a little tight on the money side because the company has not paid for four months.
Moreover
, I have to shift to another city because of my office relocation. The company has purchased the new building over there and left
this
 rented building. As per my conversation with my manager, They are planning to buy a 2nd office building in
this
 city as well and I will surely rejoin the class with you once get back here. Again, It was a pleasure to have me for the training. Hoping to see you soon. Best Regards, Mandeep Singh
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task response
Ensure that all the points outlined in the task prompt are fully addressed in the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Work on using appropriate transition words and phrases to enhance the coherence of the text.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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