Some people say that it is acceptable to test medicine intended for people on animals. Others, however, believe that it is not right to use animals in this research. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
think that testing medicaments for
people
on
animals
is
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a good idea, but others disagree with it. In my opinion, it is not
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decision to use
animals
in these
experiments
. Some
people
are convinced that checking
people
’s medicine on
animals
is a good way to discover drugs’ side effects and
then
make them better.
For example
, many
experiments
are carried out on pregnant rats to find out how their organisms react to different drugs. Through test results, researchers change the composition of medicine or duration of treatment. It can help with medications for pregnant women and decrease negative effects on their bodies or the fetus. Others are against the participation of
animals
in medical trials because results
which
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found
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from these researches may be incorrect and
also
threatened, because we have different organisms from
animals
and our reaction
on
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these medicaments can be opposite and really dangerous for our bodies
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Moreover
, these researches are
animals
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abuse.
Animals
are in pain or they become dead after some
experiments
. Humans try to protect them from
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medical
researches
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and they go to rallies and write petitions to the government. I completely agree that
this
method when researchers use
animals
and put them in danger isn’t humane. I believe that researchers can find another way to make their
experiments
and everybody needs to take care of
animals
and preserve them
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safety
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. In conclusion,
although
some groups of
people
don’t see a problem when
medicine
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is checked on
animals
, I think it is horrible to use them in
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putting them in danger.
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