Some people believe that travelling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture. Others feel that it is better to travel with people you know. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Most individuals have the view that going on a journey alone is the right
way
to experience a country and
it's
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its
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way
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a way
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of life meanwhile, others have the view that
,
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it is better to embark on a
jorney
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journey
with
people
closeto
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close to
you. Travelling from
one
country to the other is the best
way
to know a city well
as well as
knowing
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how certain things are done there. Many
people
feels
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it is best to engage in
such
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the such
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journey
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alone, but others
also
think going on a
trip
with
people
you know is the best form of travelling.
However
, I believe travelling with
people
you know ,
such
as friends and family is a unique
way
of having a
joyeous
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joyful
trip
.
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essay will elaborate on both views
as well as
making
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my view known.
Firstly
, travelling in general
,
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is very costive. Considering the cost of transportation,
huge
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and huge
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bill
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bills
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in booking a hotel not to talk about the money
one
will spend
in
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feeding. If
one
is to travel with a friend or family, the person
have
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to pay twice the amount he would have paid if he had gone on the same
trip
alone.
Conversely
, going on
excurtion
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excursion
excursions
with a relative or a group you know, provides a form of security. Members of a tour group become each
others
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,keeper
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keeper
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. All movements are done in groups,
hence
, the
whereabout
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whereabouts
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of a participant
is
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known to everyone.
Also
, it is
adviseable
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advisable
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for schools to partake in
this
activity as a group. when
student
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students
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go
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on an excursion together, they tend to share knowledge
on
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apply
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what they know about a nation with their colleagues. And as they go home they pass the gained knowledge
with
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to
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other family members. In conclusion, I believe for the sake of companionship and distribution of knowledge,
people
must always go on a
trip
in groups
so
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as
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far as
one
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they
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can afford.
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