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Some people believe that travelling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture. Others feel that it is better to travel with people you know. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most individuals have the view that going on a journey alone is the right
way
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 to experience a country and
it's
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its
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way
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a way
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 of life meanwhile, others have the view that
,
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 it is better to embark on a
jorney
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journey
 with
people
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closeto
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close to
 you. Travelling from
one
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 country to the other is the best
way
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 to know a city well
as well as
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knowing
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 how certain things are done there. Many
people
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feels
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 it is best to engage in
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such
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journey
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a journey
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 alone, but others
also
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 think going on a
trip
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 with
people
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 you know is the best form of travelling.
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, I believe travelling with
people
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 you know ,
such
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 as friends and family is a unique
way
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 of having a
joyeous
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joyful
trip
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.
This
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 essay will elaborate on both views
as well as
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making
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make
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 my view known.
Firstly
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, travelling in general
,
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 is very costive. Considering the cost of transportation,
huge
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and huge
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bill
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bills
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 in booking a hotel not to talk about the money
one
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 will spend
in
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on
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 feeding. If
one
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 is to travel with a friend or family, the person
have
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 to pay twice the amount he would have paid if he had gone on the same
trip
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 alone.
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, going on
excurtion
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excursion
excursions
 with a relative or a group you know, provides a form of security. Members of a tour group become each
others
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other's
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,keeper
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keeper
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keepers
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. All movements are done in groups,
hence
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, the
whereabout
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whereabouts
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 of a participant
is
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are
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 known to everyone.
Also
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, it is
adviseable
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advisable
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 for schools to partake in
this
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 activity as a group. when
student
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students
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go
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goes
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 on an excursion together, they tend to share knowledge
on
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apply
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what they know about a nation with their colleagues. And as they go home they pass the gained knowledge
with
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to
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 other family members. In conclusion, I believe for the sake of companionship and distribution of knowledge,
people
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 must always go on a
trip
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 in groups
so
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as
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 far as
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one
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they
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 can afford.
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