In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion
In some countries, it is necessary to invest more money
on
building high-speed Change preposition
in
railway
lines
between cities for
people to easily access Correct word choice
so
to
the other city. Change preposition
apply
For
Change preposition
Me
me
, who already lived in Bandung, I believed our country itself should improve public transportation in several cities.
On the one hand, travelling by train between cities is much more convenient. In Correct pronoun usage
apply
fact
it is Add a comma
,fact
a
more efficient than using other transportation Correct article usage
apply
such
as cars or planes. Moreover
, the train ticket is not expensive and you do not have to wait for long in a traffic jam. Train
is Add an article
The train
a
best alternative to use for someone who wants to reach their destination quickly and do their job inside. Change the article
the
Also
, it can carry a large number of passengers at the same time and can carry the
cargo safely.
Correct article usage
apply
On the other hand
, public transportation is the
most Change preposition
in the
demanded
Replace the word
demand
to
improve in any country, especially from my city in Bandung. Investing Fix the infinitive
apply
for
existing vehicles is likely more efficient. With the various budgets of public transport, it could be enhanced to be used by numerous populations. Public Change preposition
in
transportations
only Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
costs
by improving the facilities or Change the verb form
cost
needs
to be repaired and maintained, Change the verb form
need
therefore
it would be more sustainable than constructing new railway
lines
.
In conclusion, I believe the construction of new railway
lines
for high-speed trains is really beneficial to improve public transport, however
the investment should be put Add a comma
,however
in
the available public Change preposition
into
transports
. It will be cheaper than adding up new Fix the agreement mistake
transport
railway
lines
which will cost up
a lot. With the situation itself, the rest of the money can be allocated to other developments.Change preposition
apply
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite