the amount of time spend on sports and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight childer ? do you think this the best way to deal with the problem? what other solutions can you suggest
The best way to overcome the problem of excessive weight in
children
is to expand the amount of time spent on sports
and exercise
. However
, a child
's diet also
plays an important role in weight loss. In my opinion, sports
and exercise
in schools are the best way to overcome the issue. In addition
, parents need to take care of what their child
is eating on regular
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Firstly
, schools that concentrate equally on both studies and sports
, have many advantages. such
as students having high energy throughout the day, and performing better in their studies. for example
, in a school
that does not let children
play, or exercise
in school
, students will not show interest in going there. and, because of no sports
children
may not know about their capabilities. namely, few children
may be good in a specific sport but because of no time in school
, they might not be able to know that so, it's a complete loss on both sides school
and children
.
Secondly
, apart from sports
and exercise
, food
has a major role in gaining weight. nowadays children
often eat fast food
which leads to obesity and other diseases. to
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child
consuming junk food
on regular
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.
In conclusion, schools need to add more time to students' schedules for sports
and exercise
. and, food
plays an important role so it needs to be taken care of by parents.Submitted by dasarisaikrishna95 on
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Your essay provides a clear response to the prompt and presents relevant ideas. Make sure to fully address all aspects of the prompt, providing a more thorough exploration of potential solutions other than just focusing on sports and exercise.
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