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Some people like to own the place where they live. But, other like to rent, discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is an argument about whether
people
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 tend to own a
house
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 or choose to
rent
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 a place to live.
This
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people
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 should own their property than
rent
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 a
house
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. The price of the property is higher than ever before. If
people
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 are not buying a
house
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 now, they cannot purchase a
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 10 years later.
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, my parents buy a
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 in Taipei a decade ago, the price is lower than 1000 million.
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, the price is increasing year by year. Now, you barely can own a
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 to live in when you only have 1000 million. As times go by,
people
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 have fewer and fewer options to select the proper land for them to live. In
this
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 case, I believe that owning a place is an important thing.
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, there are several disadvantages for
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 to consider for renting a
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. The owner can have their
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 back if they choose to. Even if
people
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 pay their
rent
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, it cannot provide a long-term promise for
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.
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,
people
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 can lose a place to live at any second.
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people
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 cannot live a steady and cheerful life as they wish.
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 a serious problem for
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 to think about. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 choose to
rent
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 a
house
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 to live in, from my perspective, I think buying a
house
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 is a better action to make for the long-term goal.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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