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Thanks to low-cost airlines, many people can travel abroad. What advantages and disadvantages do tourists bring to the countries they visit?

#thanks #airlines #people #travel #tourists #countries #visit
The low
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airlines
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airline's
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 tickets prices
is
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are
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 a big motivation for people who love to have
news
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new
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 experiences
traveling
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travelling
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 because if the
airlines
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airline's
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 companies have cheaper flights gives economic
beneficts
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benefits
 to
safe
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save
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 money to the
travelers
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travellers
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 who love
meet
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to meet
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 and explore new
countries
,
safe
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save
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 money having good
descount
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discount
to buy tickets help to the
contries
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countries
 to active the tourist economy
also
beause
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because
 they will receive people who will spend money visiting
them
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their
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countries
. If the
countries
 do not have clear
the
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apply
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rules and culture of the
countries
 that will be a
problems
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problem
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 for the visitors and can create a big misunderstands for people who can have a bad impression
adn
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and
 those can create a bad reputation for the other new tourist or
travelers
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travellers
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 who are interested to visit
them
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their
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countries
. In
conclution
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conclusion
 my personal
advantages
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advantage
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 is for the
countries
 is make the rules clear
for
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so
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 the tourist
to
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apply
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do
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apply
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not have any
incovenients
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inconvenience
inconvenient
inconveniences
 visiting them.
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