The best way for a country to prepare for the future is to invest more resources in its young people. How true do you think of it? What is the best way too invest resources?

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The countries should create new politics to support people who have passion,

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talents and knowledge who can not study and access superior education because they do not have the money to invest in education and/or do not have the connection to participate in big important projects to help their nation to have better future

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the politician usually give that chances for close friends or families (CORRUPTION) who does not have the capacity to apport good ideas to advance with wisdom. The different states will give many scholarships to good students but ,

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they do not know where are the brilliant minds who can help the region to grow in different areas

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the countries more stable in the economy using those smart people with awesome brains. In conclusion, to have better resources politicians should gift a

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scholarships to students with good qualifications in different signatures to have a better future and benefit both

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they are selfish and ambitious just thinking

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the love for the state and

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a better future.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

179 words

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Fully explain your ideas

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching T.V . However, TV cannot replace the book as a learning tool,which is why children are less well educated today,to what extent do you agree with this statement ?

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