More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

One of the most controversial issues today
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to
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. It is observed that more and more teenagers are dealing with
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overweight
problems in modern countries. There are reasons contributing to
this
phenomenon.
Also
, there are impacts regarding
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this
incident which I will discuss in
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essay.
To begin
with, there are two main reasons that we may mention. The first cause is related to fast-food.
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, in
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particular
, school
children
eat so
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prepared
meal
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.
As a result
of
this
situation, they are becoming overweight. The second reason is that
chindren
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children
who do not do enough
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exercises are getting
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overweight
.
For example
,
according to
many studies, teens who eat food and do not do
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sport
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activities, their brain
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are
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slower than others.
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, it is
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clear that parents should
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protect their
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fast food
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and they encourage their
children
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different
sport
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activities.
Moreover
, there are mentioned two main bad effects. The first and
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most
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is that it leads to many
disaeses
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diseases
such
as blood pressure and heart-attack problem. The second impact is that it creates
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an unhealty
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unhealty
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unhealthy
population.
As a result
of
this
contidion
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condition
, new
genarations
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generations
generation
might have to deal with many genetic
disaeses
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diseases
.
For instance
, in the USA citizens generally choose to eat
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meal
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, so most people face serious problems.
Hence
,
goverments
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governments
government
should protect their society to overcome
this
problem. In conclusion,
children
are getting
outweight
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overweight
in
modern
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age because of eating
fast-foods
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fast foods
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and inadequate
sport
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sports
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exercises.
In addition
to effects which are causing many
disaeses
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diseases
and
unhealty
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unhealthy
population. If
this
problem continues, there will be harmful consequences for humanity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • fast food culture
  • screen time
  • metabolic disorders
  • healthcare expenditure
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative strategies
  • nutritional education
  • public health policy
  • body mass index (BMI)
  • emotional well-being
  • stigmatization
  • exercise regimen
  • eating habits
  • junk food
  • socioeconomic factors
  • health literacy
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