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Some people think that homework is not necessary for students’ development. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #homework #students’ #development
In today's world, the educational systems can relatively differ from others all over the globe. Some individuals consider that
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students
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better results in every quiz without doing homework. I partly agree with
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 essay, I will illustrate the pros and cons of doing homework based on my point of view and support it with examples as well. On one hand, the teachers are in charge of embracing any tasks by the
students
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the
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studying
 hours. So, if the government gives some independency to educators regarding applying distinctive methods throughout the schooling period, ones will endeavour to teach easily
students
 any subjects as much as possible. At the same time, if the
students
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 to learn any
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 in only 45 minutes and the educators do not give them any task which they are responsible for doing at home, it will be considerably more productive and purposeful planning for both sides.
Furthermore
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acquiring any information and doing homework in the same period in the class effectively influence
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the
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comprehensions
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. Because they are obliged to learn and solve their exercises in front of their
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tutors
 and normally if
students
 cannot understand any part of the lesson, they unthinkingly can ask their questions
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their educators. These conditions undoubtedly create
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 liberated environment at schools.
Moreover
, if the
students
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exercises or
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questions which
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 newly taught
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 in front of the authority, they can feel self-confident.
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 extremely significant role in the
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 development. In conclusion, from
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my point of view, if the whole
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 can be taught and solved the all exercises in the same period by the pupils, they can get more time
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 their development of personality with parental skills at home.
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