3.Patriotism is negative. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

Patriotism
has been a subject
for
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debate for a long time now. Some
people
argue that
patriotism
is bad and can cause
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a divide
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divide
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among
people
. I personally agree
to
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this
argument. In
this
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I will explain the reasons for supporting and not supporting
patriotism
. First and foremost,
patriotism
is the
believe
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that one should be proud and support their nation.
As a result
,
people
would be willing to do whatever it takes to help their country,
such
as going to war.
This
is what happened throughout history.
Thus
,
country
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with patriotic
citizen
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citizens
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would be stronger in the warring period. That's why having a high level of
patriotism
is good for the country, especially in a defensive scenario.
However
, willingness to go to
such
an extreme action oftentimes led to the demise of the citizen.
For example
, in the first world war, many young boys died in the trench pointlessly. Their
patriotism
was capitalized
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the politician and the
higher ups
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to
further
their goal. Unfortunately,
this
happened so many times in many different countries.
This
is the
reasong
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reason
reasoning
why some
people
reject
patriotism
. So,
while
patriotism
is technically good for the state, it's not necessarily good for the
people
's
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. The spirit to do the greater good is easily steered to do
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for the benefit of few
people
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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