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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages .do yoou agree or disagree?

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modern
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the modern
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 era, vehicles
is
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most
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a most
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 common part
in
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of
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 almost
everyones
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everyone's
houses
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house
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, using
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car
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a car
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have
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has
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 its benefits but some
people
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 disagree
to
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with
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this
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. Around 20 th century onwards,
people
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 not bothering about their savings to buy
cars
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. Being in family
life
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 a
car
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 play
vital
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a vital
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 role in
life
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.
In the
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 below paragraph has explained
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the advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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 and disadvantages of
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the car
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car
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cars
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.
Firstly
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, most
of
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apply
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individual
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the individual
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house
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houses
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 have
cars
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 as we compare to
olden
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the olden
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 days. Even though
rate
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the rate
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 of price drastically
increasing
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increased
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 for each model of
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cars
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car
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,
people
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 were not
bothering
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bothered
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 about the cost to purchase. In metropolitan cities, almost all take
cars
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 to go office. In order to avoid traffic and pollution, private companies were providing cab facilities but still
people
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refusing
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refused
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 to
transport
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themselvestransport
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. In order to make comfortable themselves choosing
own
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their own
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 vehicle, undoubtedly person itself creating pollution in busy traffic
life
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 style.
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,
people
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becoming
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become
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 lazy and themselves stopping to walk even for
small
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a small
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distance
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distances
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.
Currently
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,Currently
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 as we
seen
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have seen
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 in newspapers, students were drunk and drive in cities and creating
major
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a major
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accident
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accidents
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.
Hence
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 the usage of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 must be controlled by youngsters, and
also
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pollution
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the pollution
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 rate increasing day by day.
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,
people
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itself
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themselves
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 reason for making
disadvantage
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disadvantaged
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of
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apply
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cars
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. Having
a
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your
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 own
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cars
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car
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very
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is very
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 important in
case
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the case
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 of family
life
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.
Any
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In any
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 emergency cases like if someone
not
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is not
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 well
in
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at
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home
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the home
a home
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instead
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 of calling and
waiting
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forwaiting
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 an ambulance, having a
car
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 could support us to reach hospitals for immediate treatment to get. During holidays,
people
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 having
cars
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 in
house
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the house
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 will plan
a trips
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a trip
trips
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 and make the time adjustment whenever they want to visit their destination.
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, need not
to
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apply
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adjust public transport timings to travel anywhere.
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, using
cars
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having
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has
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 its more advantage.
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, its usage
found
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was found
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 more valuable than comparing its disadvantage. In summary, using
cars
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 found
advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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according to
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there
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their
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 requirements. But in my opinion, it seems to have more
useful
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use
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 in everybody's
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lifestyle
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life
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 style as per present generation mode or living
habit
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habits
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.

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