Human activities have negative effects on plants and animal species. Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem Other people believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Plants and
species
are affected by human activities. A large number of people think that we do not have much time
to protect plants and species
, whereas
others say that effective actions would improve this
worst condition. This
essay agrees that practical efforts from the authorities would improve this
worst circumstance.
On the one hand, plants and species
are already endangered position due to
human activities and we do not have much time
to protect these creatures. For example
, Indian white tigers are endangered wild animals
because of poaching which means these animal's skin and teeth are in huge demand in the black market, thus
, now we have very few of these animals
. To be more precise, forests were altered into people's accommodation places while
wild animals
lost their motherland and were captivated in zoos. Therefore
, there is no time
to protect these species
because we already destroyed them.
On the other hand
, there is a chance to conserve these species
by effective actions from the government. Strict punishment should be implemented who poaching wild animals
and many forest officers should be appointed to retain them. For instance
, the black market should be monitored by the local forest officers and residents to avoid illegal hunting. In addition
, people should build houses only the residential locations besides
forests and wild areas; the ruling party also
should provide permission to build apartments only in residential places. Hence
, these are the effective measures that can improve this
worst circumstance.
To conclude
, wild creatures are affected by human activities like cutting trees and building more flats in forest spaces, so adverse situations cannot be solved because we do not have much time
to do anything, although
strict rules against poachers and occupying wild places to build flats from the ruling party this
situation should improve. Therefore
, I agree that strict rules can be improved.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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