It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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history

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because there are a lot of insights brought by

history

. The local past events can lead students to be more like with their culture;

however

, I think that global

history

will bring more messages

due to

the cultural differences. In

this

essay, I will explain why world event is more important to be taught in school. Nowadays, schoolchildren are more likely to forget their own traditions

due to

modernization.

Although

history

is a subject in their curriculum, it is not their favourite one. The national past events will make the children realize how their ancestors had tried so hard to give a better life for their offspring;

for example

, Indonesian independence heroes. The story of how they fought, struggled or even died will become an ignition to build nationalism among the student.

Furthermore

, our children will have a better vision for our country's future.

However

, there is no doubt that world

history

also

important to be learned. The different ways of thinking will increase the critical thinking of pupils,

thereafter

world has so many heroes that have good character.

For example

Abraham Lincoln, the US President

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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195 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

heritage
cultural identity
ancestry
traditions
globalization
empathy
contemporary issues
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perspective
civilization
diversity
innovations
historical significance
nationalism
cosmopolitanism
historiography
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It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many retired people today are choosing to live in other countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that schools is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?

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Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?