The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graphs display the proportions of households using electric machines and

also

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number

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a number

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hours

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per week devoted to

houseworks

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housework

house works

from 1920 to 2019.

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, it is possible to notice the upward trend in

usage

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the usage

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of various electric machines over the observed period

as well as

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decline

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a decline

the decline

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in the amount of time spend on

houseworks

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housework

house works

. In 1920 almost no one owned

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a refrigirator

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refrigirator

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refrigerator

refrigerators

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, the percentage of homes with

refrigiratore

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refrigerators

refrigerator

grew rapidly to 90 % in 1960 and in 1980 everyone used

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a refrigirator

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refrigirator

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refrigerators

this

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has not changed until 2019. The usage of

vacuum

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vacuums

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rose gradually from 30 % in 1920 to 100 % in 2000 and remained at the same level

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in 2019. The

wasching

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washing

machine, which had the highest proportion - 40 % - among other devices in 1930, did not

experienced

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a significant increase in usage. The growth

stoped

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stopped

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in 1960, when it

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, in 1980, experienced a dip to around 65 %. In 2019, the percentage of

housholds

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households

using washing

machine

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machines

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was around 75 %. The number of

hours

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spend on

house related

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house-related

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tasks fall

dramaticly

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dramatically

during

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from

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1920 to 1960, in numbers from 50 to 20

hours

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it declined very slowly to 10

hours

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in 2019.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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3 paragraphs

200 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

household appliances
time-efficient
labour-saving devices
technological innovations
ownership rate
housework chores
domestic workload
automation
advancements
trend analysis
societal shifts
economic impact
durability
lifespan of appliances
maintenance
historical comparison
time allocation
drudgery reduction
energy consumption
disruption in trends

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