The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram describes whole the process of producing

sugar

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from

sugar

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canes

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cane

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. In total, there are 7 stages of production, starting from growing the

sugar

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canes up to a

ready to consume

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ready-to-consume

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sugar

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Firstly

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sugar

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cones

needs

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need

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to be grown,

this

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usually takes one to one and a half years. When they are fully grown, either a specifically designed machine

harvest

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harvests

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them or it is done by hand – each

sugar

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cone is

cutted

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cut

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with a blade slightly above the ground. The collected

sugar

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cones are

then

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crushed using a special

wheel powered

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wheel-powered

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machine,

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this

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which

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produces a juice, which is purified by employing

limestone

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a limestone

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filter. By applying heat to the filtered juice, in an evaporator,

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apply

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removes liquidity and transforms it into

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apply

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syrup. Which is put into

centrifuge

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a centrifuge

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that is

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able to disentangle

sugar

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crystals from the syrup. In the

last

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step, the

sugar

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is dried and cooled in a special barrel.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

153 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

manufacturing process
sugar cane
harvesting
transporting
factory
crushing
extracting
juice
filtering
impurities
heating
evaporating
syrup
boiling
crystallizing
sugar
separating
drying
packaging
distribution
stage
process

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