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some people think that the world eventually have only one language. do you think the advantages of having one global language outweigh the disadvantages

#people #world #language
Many people have been thinking that the world will have only one
language
 in the future to communicate with each other. There are several advantages and
disadvantage
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 that should be discussed. On the positive side, there would be many advantages
of
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 having one
language
 to use in the world. It is important to realize that communication with other people from different countries would be a lot easier than before.
For example
, it will be easy to build friendships with others from all over the world without any problem. It would help us to travel to different countries with no need to learn the countries’ mother
language
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languages
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.
For example
, nowadays it is hard for some people to travel or study in
other
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country
 because of the
language
 barrier. On the negative side, there would be no barriers between the countries.
In addition
, no difference in the cultures or traditions in every
country
 would happen. If we all speak the same
language
, we will lose
the
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cultural and
language
 diversity.
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 we won’t have our own mother
language
 that
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 each
country
 from the other. Another key point, there would be a negative impact on
the
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tourism
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 because we will lose
the
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interest to explore a new
country
 that speaks the same
language
. In the final analysis, if we speak the same
language
, several positive and negative impacts would affect us. In fact, the disadvantages outweigh the advantage of speaking the same
language
. Our cultures should be preserved in order to represent our
country
 and its heritage.
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