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In the last few decades, an increasing number of animal species have become endangered or have died out completely. It appears likely that this situation will continue. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to prevent it?

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Unfortunately, In recent times many animal species had suffered extinction. several factors played role in
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 suggestions that I believe should be considered to resolve the issue. Unfortunately, the main cause of animal extinction is humans, people play a major role in animal eradication directly by deforestation and hunting
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 and indirectly through pollution, which results in environmental change which leads to the death of many
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. a clear example is global warming
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 green house gases emitted from population vehicles, heating, fossil fuels and even certain ways of farming.
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 our role as humans must be positive,
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 of the detrimental emissions that affect the environment we must tend to use renewable energy as it is clean and has almost zero impact on the environment.
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, Uk had increased the electric power production that depends on solar panels and wind turbines into 22% in 2022 comparing to 5% in 2019.
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, authorities should impose a tax on traditional fuel,
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, passengers' orientation toward electric vehicles will increase, another step that should be taken is imposing laws against animal hunting
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 logging and encouraging forestation to reduce the harmful impact and balance the ecosystem.
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 but not least,
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 are a crucial part of the ecosystem, even though the immense loss that humans incurred through some animal extinction, still there a substantial chance to save the
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 and the planet by imposing global rules that protect
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 and the environment,
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 the global trend should be toward clean energy when it comes to energy resources consumption.
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