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Some people think that completing university education is the best way to get a good job. Others, however, think experience and soft skills are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are some people who believe that having a good job depends on a
university
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 education with a good
degree
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while
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 others argue that having
experience
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 and using soft
skills
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 appropriately are enough to open all doors in professional life. Personally, I believe that
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 having a
university
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degree
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 provides a significant advantage,
experience
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 and some
skills
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,
such
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 as managing people and time, being kind and so on more important than a
university
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degree
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. On the one hand,
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 the undeniable fact that having a
university
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degree
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 shows you as a more intelligent and reliable person in
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society in some cultures. Using these advantages, individuals can find jobs in government organizations.
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, being a doctor, a teacher or a lawyer, you do not have any other chance except to complete a
university
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degree
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 with a good GPA.
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, there are several global companies all over the world which do not require any certificate or
university
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degree
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 to allow an employee to their organization. Surely, they should test your knowledge and
experience
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 in the field, and
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 they get familiar you with the work environment and they want you can adapt easily, divide your time in the right way and behave other employees as a friend which is possible with soft
skills
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. In conclusion, getting a good and permanent job requires you to expand your knowledge and background in a related field.
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 me,
experience
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 allows you to develop hard
skills
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 as an advantage and as an employee having soft
skills
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 makes you a loved one in a company and it leads you to advance in your career path.
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Some sentences could be more concise. Aim to express your ideas clearly and directly.
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Your essay has a strong introduction and conclusion, clearly presenting both sides of the argument and your own opinion.
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You provided a well-organized structure that allows the reader to easily follow your argument. Your main points are supported efficiently.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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