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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week, a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

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Dear Kate, How are you? Trust you are feeling pretty well. I'm ecstatic to write to you about the outcome of the final competition which stopped you from joining us
as a result
 of your recent injuries.
Firstly
, it will gladden your heart that our team
finally
 won the match and received the national prize of ten thousand dollars.
In addition
, I vividly remembered your prediction about the sports activity and everything turned out exactly,
thus
, making
this
 year's competition extremely magical.
Secondly
, when the team realized that you won't be available to join the game, everyone felt so nervous and afraid that we were going to lose the match,
however
 with a perfect replacement and encouragement from our coach, we came out victorious.
Furthermore
, I really missed your presence as we would have gotten more scores against the other squad and even finished on time without going into a draw.
Additionally
, I felt so happy being a part of the school team as I have garnered more skills and tricks from your assistance and I really want to appreciate your kind gesture. Get well soon buddy. Best wishes, Remy
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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