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Teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work. Do what extent do you agree or disagree?

#teenagers #community #work
It is important to consider whether young people should enrol in free-of-charge
work
 in their spare time, as it can bring positive outcomes for them and for the population. I agree with
this
 up to an extent, as I firmly believe that it can be beneficial,
although
 it should be the teenager´s option,
hence
 not mandatory. In the first instance, community
work
 often brings positive rewards to the person who chooses to
do
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itdo
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.
This
 is because enhances the feeling of belonging to a society and self-esteem. A prime example of
this
 is when a teenager,
while
 a member of a certain community, helps to improve the park facilities in his hometown,
this
 leads to an increased sense of self-worth. If they are not available to produce
this
 type of activity in their hometown, they would feel isolated from the rest of the population.
Nevertheless
, if
this
 type of task should be required to do free of charge, rather than optional, can leave a feeling of resentment in the teenager towards the job.
For instance
, when someone is doing it without motivation and passion, they often do not enjoy doing the
work
, thereby it is not done properly.
In contrast
, if they happily opt for doing the task out of their own will, they would put much effort, resulting in a very good job done. In conclusion,
although
 it is detrimental for society to have the young generation helping out with
work
 around the city, I am a vehement supporter that these unpaid jobs should be done by teenager´s option in order to be done successfully.
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